Compliment

With the deadline for my CASPA application approaching, I have been working and reworking my personal statement.  I wasn't sure what to think of it, so I asked our very brilliant and talented proposal writer to review it and I was pleasantly surprised at her comments:

"I read it quickly, but I’m quite certain it is better written than 90 percent of the statements the school will receive!

   You have a very warm and persuasive style that seems to speak from the heart. I did not find it repetitive.  Your detailed explanation of the first-hand experiences you had shadowing other professionals was very impressive.

   Your intro also is good: to the point, compelling and thoughtful.  I really don’t have any substantial changes to suggest. If you have addressed the areas they ask you to address, and it is the proper length, I think it’s in good shape."

I think having someone read and critique something so personal can make one feel very vulnerable.  It is very humbling to ask someone to critique such a personal document, and to have such nice compliments really puts my mind at ease.  I have heard on more than one occasion that I write really well, but I feel that my writing is still a little juvenile.  I struggle the most with grammar and punctuation, which happen to be the two areas we hardly covered in school due to our English teacher leaving and problems finding a decent substitute.  I also have a tendency to write the way I speak, which isn't exactly what you call sophisticated.  :o)     I do enjoy writing and at one point I even wanted to become a writer.  Throughout high school I would write quite a bit and even started a few chapters of a book, but once I graduated I stopped pretty much stopped.  Who knows, maybe one of these days I'll get back into it.